Help! can anyone please check the following paragraph for errors?

your first sentence makes it sound like the idea is "money brings eternal joy in the media" when you're TRYING to say that the idea in media is that "money brings eternal joy". I would suggest you rephrase that. your second sentence also needs to be rephrased. you say " actor heath ledger, who played a gay cowboy, ect ect" and people who don't know who he is are left thinking "what?". you have to explain there "IN THE MOVIE BROKEBACK MOUNTAIN played a gay cowboy"